Struggling in sight I see a blurry person walk into my hospital room. As soon as I heard her voice I knew it was my hero keeping me alive. I would try to speak but it's all just a mumble. She took my mom into the hall. I caught the words,
“We are trying are best, there's only so much we can do. he has made it far and trust me we are trying our best.” Right then and there both my mom and I burst into tears. But in the end here I am writing a story.
I really like your story. You are missing a capital in the third line.
ReplyDeleteYour story is pretty good. Good line at the end! But I`m confused. Is the doctor your hero?
ReplyDeleteYour story is a little confusing and I am unsure of how it fits in with the prompt. Remember capitals at the beginning of sentences. I'm not sure that "struggling in sight" is nessecary and you might want to change it to something else. It doesn't exactly make a whole lot of sense. I take it that you are somewhere in between conciousness and unconciousness, but you are still crying.
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